14 comments on “TDADP chapter 58

  1. I’ve read snuff novel to know whenever there’s a term Holy Kingdom it actually means Unholy Assholes…
    thx for the update btw.

  2. I’ve read enough novel to know whenever there’s a term Holy Kingdom it actually means Unholy Assholes…
    thx for the update btw.

  3. ” Did he caught by Joseph? ” >> “Was he caught by Joseph?”
    Any words to slender her would only mean death. >> Any words to slander her would only mean death.

    might be more missed things but things that just got me… Thanks for the chapter, can’t wait to see Mari’s reaction to OP Yu. Hope she recovers quickly and they get on with their happy adventures.

  4. Will reread this 2morrow… Somethings didn’t make sense in my head (a bit too much than my normal, I blame the hour (12AM) :V)

  5. The first sentence is incomplete, combine it with the second one by changing “The east district of Comer city. It was where the poor and the lowest rank of population lived.” to “The east district of comer city is where the poor and…”

    The third line has a typo, “spy” should be “spies”

    there’s a few more typos in this paragraph “There are men inside discussed something. Their appearance was that of the poor but behind their rag clothes, muscle as hard as a steel can be glimpsed..”
    “discussed” –>> “discussing” and “muscle” should be “muscles”

    “Does anyone know where the enchanter gone? ” needs “has” in between “enchanter” and “gone”

    ” we don’t know where he gone to. There is no clue. ” needs “has” in between “gone” and “to”
    the second sentence needs some rewording and I’d rather not touch that since I’m not sure what it’s supposed to say

    ” No, probably it was by Mussu.” –>> “No, it was probably by Mussu.” though it could possibly sound a bit better if you change it to “No, he was probably caught by Mussu.” but that’s just my opinion

    “Of course, Mussu gathered many adventurer with the power of B rank and higher. If that’s the case we don’t have any choice but the retreat for now. If not, we may fail our mission. ” needs “has” between “Mussu” and “gathered” and “adventurer” needs an “s” since it should be plural
    “but the retreat for now” has a typo, “the” should be “to”

    “The number of the spy is originally 8 people. Four of them have been killed by Joseph.” –>> “There were originally 8 spies”

    “This is the Archbishop order. ” Archbishop needs an ” ‘s ” since the order belongs to that guy

    ” In the first place, why did the Archbishop interested in the black haired boy? ” to “Why is the Archbishop interested in that black haired boy in the first place?” and I kinda stopped here lol

    I’m sorry if I offended somebody somehow, but I just had to try doing some of that proofreading/editing stuff you guys always do. It looked pretty fun before I tried doing it for real XD

    • Im Still confused I thought stella love’s yu like a grandson? Or a son or something? Is that all an act? I m thingking that thew bishop summoned yu and stella is only a watcher/observer etc.

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