7 comments on “Earth’s Core Book 3 Chapter 17!

    • “What is that your canine told me, Rolv, your unit lost to a human and a boy, at that”.
      remove the unneeded comma
      “What is that your canine told me, Rolv, your unit lost to a human and a boy at that”.

      And just a friendly reminder here, that the period should be inside the quote not outside.

  1. Thought, not once did he consider Zax surpassing him in any aspect other than the body.
    I am confused about this sentence. I thought Zax’s Ki has been blocked so it cannot be ‘”in any aspect” other than the body’

    He could not tell what was different but something creeped him,
    It doesn’t look right unless you wanted to add ‘out’ or something?
    He could not tell what was different but something creeped him out,

  2. After the last blow Zax reappeared and stopped near the body of captain Kane, not a drop of blood dirtied him.
    Replace ‘dirtied’ with ‘on’ instead?

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