5 comments on “Earth’s Core B4 C16

  1. Even though with his current appearance if they’ll see him in the future they won’t be able to recognize him, it could be the start of a trail that is better to eliminate now”.
    trail –> trial

    ‘There must be away… Big sis or Master or that woman should know! I will not let his mark remain on you, Anet!’
    away –> a way

    Whoever was left in there did not earn his concern.
    did not concern him
    ‘earn his concern’ seems weird. Or maybe replace ‘earn’ with ‘deserve’?
    Whoever was left in there did not deserve his concern.

    ‘My fingers also!’ That was another immense surprise. The three fingers the Derneldar founder cut also grew.
    grew –> regrown

    Anything further is simply the natural growth pace of his hair.
    Anything further is simply the natural pace of growth of his hair.

    Wearing the Eden Formation’s school uniforms and the pair of shoes, needless to say, despite the formation that blocked his Soul Sense, Zax knew where he was and with complicated expression climbed the stairs.
    one or two more comma needed
    Wearing the Eden Formation’s school uniforms and the pair of shoes, needless to say, despite the formation that blocked his Soul Sense, Zax knew where he was and with complicated expression, climbed the stairs.
    Or,
    Wearing the Eden Formation’s school uniforms and the pair of shoes, needless to say, despite the formation that blocked his Soul Sense, Zax knew where he was and, with complicated expression, climbed the stairs.

    “Err… Sorry, I didn’t mean it that way. But, I met the vice principal and the principal and none of them projected toward me the same level of dominance”.
    Err –> Er or Errr
    It is best to say er/errr because err it means error (err = error)

        • Anything further is simply the natural pace of growth of his hair.
          Or also can be written like this;
          Anything further is simply the natural pace of his hair’s growth.

    • STUMP! –> STOMP!

      stump
      stəmp
      noun
      1.
      the bottom part of a tree left projecting from the ground after most of the trunk has fallen or been cut down.
      2.
      CRICKET
      each of the three upright pieces of wood that form a wicket.
      verb
      1.
      (of a question or problem) be too hard for; baffle.
      “education chiefs were stumped by some of the exam questions”
      synonyms: baffle, perplex, puzzle, confuse, confound, defeat, put at a loss; More
      2.
      walk stiffly and noisily.
      “he stumped away on short thick legs”

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