8 comments on “Earth’s Core B4 C11 – back to regular days releases…

  1. Don learned a lot on Zax and his family.
    on –> about

    “’Don’ would be fine. You are not my student and as far as I know, no one of your household is part of my school.
    Don’ –> Don

    “Very well, Don Ram”, Zetsa accepted Don’s point, but since she felt a since of respect toward the older woman for her cultivation level and for her actions, which clarified where she stands, she added the honorific title “Ram”.
    Why is her name Don? Is name Don is for male? I could be wrong…just wondering.

    A neck was snapped and a formerly sturdy middle age man in black suit fell to the ground.
    middle-aged?

    “He did, but he forced me to marry his daughter for the position. That bastard knew I was interested in someone outside of the family and made me give up the woman I coveted”.
    Coveted is not same as loved.
    cov·et
    ˈkəvət
    verb
    past tense: coveted; past participle: coveted
    yearn to possess or have (something).
    “the president-elect covets time for exercise and fishing”
    synonyms: desire, yearn for, crave, have one’s heart set on, want, wish for, long for, hanker after/for, hunger after/for, thirst for
    “even with all they have, they covet the wealth of others”

    • I so the long comment and I though that I messed up the chapter to a frightening degree!

      What’s wrong with “Don” being a girl’s name? In more than one series I saw a woman with the name Don. If I remember correctly, in Saving Hope there is a female character with the name Don.

      I didn’t say that he loved her, only “interested” and “coveted”. Can’t I use “coveted” like in the following: “Mark coveted Betty for her body”? Sounds like a jerk, but that’s exactly what that Peats (and Mark) guy is.

      • Nothing wrong with ‘coveted’ if the meaning is intended in that way so that’s fine. Don, hmm, that’s fine too.

  2. In her eyes, the one in front of her was a man already dead, not even worthy for her to use her own movement technique
    The period is missing
    In her eyes, the one in front of her was a man already dead, not even worthy for her to use her own movement technique.

  3. Two Core Masters were hired to assassinate Sermon Kirik, Silva Kirik and Michela Kirik.
    Two Core Masters were hired to assassinate Sermon Kirik, Silva Kirik, and Michela Kirik.

  4. Hyphen In Compound Expression With Noun And Past Participle
    When a noun is put together with a past participle (a verb ending in ‑ed), this results in a compound adjective. Compound adjectives should always be hyphenated so the reader can distinguish them from the original, separate words. For instance, when we connect the noun community with the verb based, it makes the compound adjective community-based.
    http://www.grammarly.com/handbook/punctuation/hyphen/6/hyphen-in-compound-expression-with-noun-and-past-p/
    That’s why I mentioned middle-aged, not middle aged.

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